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This pic looks fine in terms of clothing. I don't see why it should be changed.
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Main concern is the shoulder line, which seems to bulge more than it should. Even if just for stetics, a thin arm is regarded as a femenine trait, AFAIK, so what turin and i raise is that the shoulder curve should be softer in the left.
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The red line is where her shoulder line actually is, covered by hair. -sorry, the line should be about 10 degrees lower than it is. I didn't double-check before posting and I don't want to redo the pic. :p

The blue line is where the bicep line should be extended to to show a more appropriately lengthed arm, also decreasing the size of the shoulder. The dark red is where her top should extend to to account for the new adjustments.

***Black line is a changed forearm.
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I was talking not about the upper part, i see the line behind the hair, i was talking about the left part, the one that connects to the forearm. Looks like the forearm is extending east, the body southeast (which is okay), but then a too bulged line connects the two, instead of a soft curve, which would make it look more like skin.
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Check out the black lines for a different forearm.
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I would recomend getting rid of the grey outline, or you could just darken it like turin did.
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Post by toms »

It seemed like a lot of white pixels to me, but as you said, it should be darker.
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I've worked on outlining--got epiphiny of how to on friday.
I won't be changing the arm too much, if I get around to it, though I think the forearm got narrowed as byproduct.
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Looks much better with this little outline change. :wink:

One last thing: her hair deco. It doesn´t look very good. :?
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Good job Thrawn, that was the only thing that I ever could seriously complain about in your work, it always looked like your art had been sloppily cut out of white printer paper, but now you fixed that, so now 200% better.
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toms wrote:Looks much better with this little outline change. :wink:
Thank you!

To all: thanks for your advice and critiques, they helped improve this (even if not a long sleeved shirt ;) )
toms wrote:One last thing: her hair deco. It doesn´t look very good. :?
is this better?
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Thrawn wrote:
toms wrote:dvice and critiques, they helped improve this (even if not a long sleeved shirt ;) ) is this better?
Was this serious? If yes, I meant you should not give her a tassel on the hair. A flower would fit better, I think.
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toms wrote:
Thrawn wrote: Was this serious? If yes, I meant you should not give her a tassel on the hair. A flower would fit better, I think.
That is supposed to be a flower headband thing :(

cleaned up a few ugly looking parts, added GIMP effect to the magic
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I think that the gimp effect is a little too bright. Hopefully you did it as a different layer and can tone down the opacity of it a bit.
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Darth Fool wrote:I think that the gimp effect is a little too bright. Hopefully you did it as a different layer and can tone down the opacity of it a bit.
Agreed. I'd like her face to be seen better than in the above image. Also, this may just be a personal preference, but I thought that the purple went better with the green than the red does.
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