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Corwin · Post by **Corwin** » November 18th, 2005, 4:37 pm

I think you really just need to redraw the whole shoulder section since it isn't right. Making parts of it darker will not help the image. Good luck on it.

toms · Post by **toms** » November 18th, 2005, 4:49 pm

Right.

I made only some changes that I would like at my point...

Garm · Post by **Garm** » November 18th, 2005, 5:47 pm

the next try

toms · Post by **toms** » November 18th, 2005, 6:04 pm

Really Great

toms · Post by **toms** » November 18th, 2005, 6:05 pm

What about if you make the neck a little thinner?

Heliomaster · Post by **Heliomaster** » November 18th, 2005, 8:01 pm

That staff is awesome.

JW · Post by JW » November 18th, 2005, 11:28 pm

Here are some things I noticed that you could take note of to make the image more realistic:

1) The face is too long and skinny - especially in comparison to the neck which is rather fat. A football player might have a neck that thick, but not a mage. A more defined jawline might help.

2) The arms and chest do not match. The left arm is over the chest while the right arm is behind the chest. The face is looking to his left. This would show the mage in a position where he is looking to his left but twisting his body to the right - very unnatural. The other problem is that since the shoulders are square to the front this is an impossibility.

3) The chest area makes him appear to be very thick-chested. He appears to be filling out his cloak quite well. The fact that the belt doesn't cinch in on his stomach also gives the impression that the mage is fat.

Those, I think, are the major issues with the piece as it is. On the plus side the staff is excellent and it seems that you are quite experienced with shading. Keep working and I'm sure you'll get there.

xtifr · Post by **xtifr** » November 19th, 2005, 12:27 am

The face is not very good (I don't know how to put it better than that), the pose is awkward (especially the right hand), the general proportions are wrong, and the whole composition seems forced. On the other hand, the texturing is beautiful, the surface details are outstanding. This is, basically, a gorgeously polished version of a mediocre/bad drawing.

My suggestion is to find someone who understands figure drawing, and get them to give you a basic figure to work from. I suspect the results could be amazing!