Oath of Allegiance [SP Desert People Campaign for 1.13.5]

[Kwandulin]

The descriptions are amazing! Especially the description of the hammerdin is spot-on! Thanks a lot for your effort! The only thing that bothers me a bit is the description of the lost athvari. I had something different in mind when creating Uzar, but it seems that I overlooked some dialogue passages that needed to be erased in order to get the new background. Here's the new approach at the lost athvari:

"The Athvari have always been destined to rule over men and be a force of guidance through their lives. While most Athvari bring order to men and women by being an unseen advisor to their kings and queens or by directly ruling in a peaceful manner, there are some Athvari that believe that chaos itself inheres in men and thus, true order can only be achieved by the destruction of the human race or by ruling with an iron fist. They stand as a living testament that even good men can follow the wrong paths."

In that sense, the Unforgotten Athvari are also "lost ones".

[ahmannar]

You're welcome for it, it's a pleasure to do this. Your revised description for the lost athvari is indeed improved, nice job!
Here is now my try on the rest of the descriptions that i missed in the earlier attempt:

Elvish High King:

Spoiler:

"Being a peaceful people by nature and attributing high value to the ones that choose the warrior path willingly, the elves need to see their leaders as individuals that they can depend upon when the darkest of times arrives to their homes. The Elvish High King, being equally skilled in both swordsmanship and archery, successfully demonstrates that no only does he represents his people, but that he'll also fight for them whenever the occasion arises."

-> The lore of wesnoth tries normally to convey that the elves are not suited for war as well as the other races due to their longevity and fewer numbers. I tried to show that a leader who chooses to give his life for its people can make them feel more secured.

Genie:

Spoiler:

-> Seeing as the afariyat as the same description as it´s race (the afariyaten), the Genie could probably have the same description as it's race (the djinn). It would mirror one race to another,given that they are similar to each other.

Genie-Kabir:

Spoiler:

"Genie-Kabir are greater djinns that often fight for a greater cause that directly or indirectly harms their enemy, the afariyaten. However, unlike their enemies whose only goal in life resides in complete annihilation, the Genie-Kabir are highly interested in maintaining and increasing their friendship with the people of the deserts, the ones that saved them from the destructive magic of the Three Kings. Weilding a magical scimitar, they are ready to protect themselves and their allies from any threat that comes to both parties."

-> I tried to drawn a parallel between the Genie-Kabir and the Afariyat-Kabir, showing that while the afariyat only care about destroying the djinns, the Genies are more interested in securing their lives and those of the people that protected them.

I think i have not missed any unit without description but, in case i have missed it, point it out to me and i will take care of that in the end of today. If you need help in something else tell me and i'll see what i can do about it.

[Whiskeyjack]

Not being able to play for some time yet, I thought I´d use this chance to at least contribute something and thus give a few comments on the descriptions (I hope that´s ok with you ahmannar, besides the few spelling corrections those are mostly personal wording preferrences meant as suggestions). As I haven´t played the campaign yet, take them with a grain of salt.

Kahin:

"An advisor with great political power, the Kahin prefer to use luxurious garments and poisonous words as his weapons against foes in place of brute force. Being armed with great respect and authority among its peers, seeing one of them on the battlefield inspires terror on their foes, as this symbolizes how much a nation wants to get rid of them.

-> either An advisor/prefers/as his weapons/seeing one or As advisors/prefer/as their weapons/seeing one of them
-> seeing -> noticing
-> terror on their foes -> terror in their foes
-> as this symbolizes how much a nation wants to get rid of them -> as they are among the greatest dangers to any nation opposed to them (the complete sentence sounded rather awkward IMO)

Maji:

"Power is something that always has been a deep desire in most people's heart. The hate and denial for the imposed dichotomy's of the Atvhari reached a breaking point, making people like the Maji dangerous for their knowledge of magic among populations that have little contact with these forbidden arts."

-> The hate and denial -> In some, the hate and denial
-> dichotomy´s -> dichotomy
-> leading people like the Maji to become very dangerous for their knowledge of magic among a people as abrasive of the forbidden arts as the desert people.
(if you don´t like the agressive notion of abrasive, use repellent; desert people: What´s the name of the Khalifate guys? How do they call themselves as a people?

Waghad-al-lahab:

"The study and dedication that the Waghad-al-lahab have given to the mysterious and ever lasting nature of fire gave them the tools to successfully maintain and use it as devastating weapon in close quarter combat. Only caring now with the spreading and witnessing of the beauty of their doings, they have no compassion for human lives neither their homes, making them hated by enemies and sometimes even their comrades."

-> have given ... gave -> have given ... availed
-> caring now with -> caring now for
-> the spreading and witnessing -> propagation and testimony
-> their doings -> their way
-> are they meant to have a kind of religion/philosophy or did you just intend that they want to burn the world? In the latter case, I propose spreading and beholding and the flames they conjured for the above two.
-> making them hated by enemies and sometimes even their comrades -> perhaps something like: oftentimes horrifying friend and foe alike? If you want to have a stronger focus on the sometimes part something like making them [feared and] despised not only by their enemies but often even their own comrades?
(perhaps forgoing feared/horrified and focusing more on the contempt for their deeds here is a good thing as quite a couple of descriptions run the evoking fear narration)

Qismat:

"In a land of honorable fighting, where the strength of armies is mostly measured by their bravery and strength, the Qismat are feared for their ability to quickly dispatch a person with the speed of a lightning bolt. Their proficiency in assassinating their targets makes sure that the people that hire them for mischievous deeds are the ones with most knowledge of their techniques, which increases the horror on common soldiers of someday facing one"

-> feared -> if you want to reduce the number of feared-narratives, perhaps use something neutral like known here (there is still the horror/horrifying part at the end left).
-> that the people that hire them for mischievous deeds are the ones with most knowledge of their techniques, which increases the horror on common soldiers of someday facing one -> only people employing them for mischievous deeds even have a hunch of their [excellent] techniques. This only serves to increase the horror common soldiers feel at the prospect of facing a Quismat one day.
(if they aren´t a mysterious sect employed by strangers but instead just servants of a special clique, replace hunch with notion)

Rakib:

"Leaders that face their foes heads-on among their own people can obtain great levels of admiration and respect. The Rakib are fealess individuals that are eager to make others feel their cold steel and overwhelming force, inspiring others to achieve comparable feats alongside these warriors."

-> among their own people can obtain great levels of admiration and respect -> often achieve great levels of admiration and respect among their people
-> fealess -> fearless
-> individuals that are eager to make others feel their cold steel and overwhelming force, inspiring others to achieve comparable feats alongside these warriors. -> individuals whose eagerness to make the enemy feel their cold steel and overwhelming fighting prowess inspires the soldiers in their wake to follow with great zeal. (or accomplish great deeds themselves if you don´t like follow with great zeal)

Wahash:

"Wahash have disregarded the use of any kind of weapons, believing that only their own strength can truly shown them as warriors. Years of sustaining a greater number of injuries, as a result of this, as made them able to block their pain and unleash a barrage of relentless attacks on whoever stands in their way."

-> disregarded -> perhaps even disavowed? Otherwise discarded.
-> weapons -> weapon
-> shown -> confirm or prove
-> Years of sustaining a greater number of injuries, as a result of this, as made them able to block their pain -> Years of sustaining a great number of injuries has toughened them to ignore all pain

Dwarvish Hammerdin:

"Eager to explore the world in search of ancient and forgotten artifacts, the dwarvish hammerdin are mostly lone survivors who will, nevertheless, embrace the company of people when that helps their cause. Their travels and artifacts collected during their lives has made them tough adversaries for any being that is an obstacle to their ever lasting quest, which leads to different paths followed by the dwarvish people. "

-> people when that helps their cause -> others if that helps to advance their cause (instead of advance another option is further)
-> collected during their lives has -> collected in the span of their lives have
-> any being that is an obstacle to their ever lasting quest, which leads to different paths followed by the dwarvish people. -> any foe foolish enough to pose an obstacle to their everlasting quest, leading them away from the usual paths of the dwarvish people.

High Athvari:

""High Athvari are the leaders of the Athvari people. Their knowledge and power assures their status as individuals worthy of respect and fear among all people of the deserts."

-> the Athvari people -> the Athvari people and the greatest among their sorcerers
(are they still sorcerers in the current version? Substite something fitting otherwise -> expanding some on ahmannar´s objective to portrait their epitome-ishness)
-> assures -> assure (perhaps ascertain?)
-> individuals worthy of -> commanding great
-> Perhaps expand the paragraph with something like Even kings will think twice before crossing them on any matter.

Lost Athvari:

"The Athvari have always been destined to rule over men and be a force of guidance through their lives. While most Athvari bring order to men and women by being an unseen advisor to their kings and queens or by directly ruling in a peaceful manner, there are some Athvari that believe that chaos itself inheres in men and thus, true order can only be achieved by the destruction of the human race or by ruling with an iron fist. They stand as a living testament that even good men can follow the wrong paths."

-> destined to rule over men -> new lore or kinda over the top wording?
-> thus, true -> thus true

Unforgotten Athvari:

"The amount of time the Three Kings of K'thar have spent on the sphere has only increased their desire and need for power, as well as ruling over all of their previous subjects and beyond them. The corruption of magic has made them completely unable to be reasonable with and made them formidable adversaries to anyone who dares to stop their nefarious plans."

-> , as well as ruling over all of their previous subjects and beyond them -> as well as the ambition to reclaim the rule over their previous subjects and extend it far beyond
-> reasonable -> reasoned

[Kwandulin]

Thanks for doing the genie ones! The suggested changes are tasty, I also hope that the changes are okay for ahmannar.

There's a handful of descriptions still missing:
Great Khalid (Ridwan, Ibn Ghani), Black Dragon (Khazran), Scarab Beetle, Minotaur, Najae-Snake, Mummy. Here are my attempts at them:

Great Khalid:

Spoiler:

While there are numerous small cities througout the sandy wastes and the ashland desert, that once were trading posts and have grown since then, there are only three major cities and each small city lies in the realm of one of the three greater cities: Serrul, the Pearl of the Desert, lies in the south of the sandy wastes and just northwards of the Bay of Clouds, while Th'arwya, the City of Gold, and its enormous tower lies to the north of the ashland deserts and southwards of the Bay of Clouds and Kesh, the military focussed city that is also called the Iron City lies to the east of the bay in the harsh mountains that are a natural barrier to the desert lands. Since the early ages of the desert lands, each of these cities have had their own succession of Great Khalids to rule over the city and its surrounding realm.

Sometimes, Great Khalids don't originate from the civil population. Instead, it is often seen, that shortly before the end of the reign or life of a Great Khalid, foreign men with a great sense of leadership and wisdom appear and win the current Great Khalid's favor and thus are proclaimed heir to the throne of the Pearl, Gold or Iron.

In 676 YW, the Great Khalids of Serrul, Th'arwya and Kesh united their vast realms and established the city of K'thar, that was meant to be a new great capitol of the desert lands. These Great Khalids are since that time known as the Three Kings and the stories of their rule still invoke fear throughout the people of the deserts."

Black Dragon:

Spoiler:

Black Dragons are just a mere myth. Yet these myths that are being told to little children are surprisingly detailed, which implies that there has been a small number of men that in fact encountered these mighty creatures.

Scarab Beetle:

Spoiler:

Scarab Beetles are seemingly ignoring the physical boundaries of the morphology and physiology of arthropods, as they are as huge as a goat. Wearing a hardened horn above his heads, the Scarab Beetles are known to be able to impale men. Beside that, there are people that are trimming them for war.

Minotaur:

Spoiler:

Minotaurs have the statue of both man and bull and are often found in the eastern parts of the mountainside around Kesh and the eastern flatlands. These strong creatures are often caught and trimmed for war, but oftentimes, catching a minotaur leads to the death of numerous soldiers and hunters, that could have played a role in wars. Thus, using these unstable creatures in war is a matter to think about not only once, but rather thrice.

Najae-Snake:

Spoiler:

While the bite of the najae-snakes itself is not deadly, the poison that is injected during the bite is known to slowly devour the victim from the inside.

Mummy:

Spoiler:

A mummy is the corpse of a fallen warrior whose soul was rejected to enter the realms of death. Filled with hatred, a mummy then roams the dark places of the desert lands to find a different way to end their suffering.

[ahmannar]

Right now i'm at work and only now do i have a small break, at the end of the day i'll read the descriptions that i missed and see if i can contribute in some way(sorry for that, it seems i missed quite a bit of them).
I'm glad more people are helping kwandulin in his campaign, thank you for the corrections, they are very good .

[Whiskeyjack]

Some minor (and in case of Elvish High King and Black Dragon bigger) suggestions and corrections.

Elvish High King:

For starters, I have to question the whole concept of an Elvish High King in Wesnoth (perhaps you give sufficient explanation for this in the campaign, but I think dropping someone like that without tying him into Wesnoth history would be a big flaw. My reasoning for this is that the elves in mainline have a variety of ruling bodies from councils to royalty, but never something more than a king. Furthermore the Elvish enclaves of the different forests are continously portraied as loosely connected (allied) but distinct groups. I´d imagine a "High King" to rule at least a couple of such enclaves (he wouldn´t nessecarily need something like under-kings).
The first step now is to clarify which elves we are talking about. IIRC, yours are the elves of the Southwood? As portraied in TSG (607-608 YW; so almost a hundred years before your campaign) the southwood is in the hands of a necromancer, while the southernmost elves are those of the Aethenwood, lead by sages. Turns out, the sage they seek actually turned necro...

Some releveant Southguard citations:

Etheliel: The elves know of the great southern forest, and have walked its paths many times.

Deoran: We have followed you away from our homes and left them unguarded. Now, where can we find this sage who knows the southern forest well?
Ethiliel:This is the Vale of Blossoming Trees. Our great sages come here to live when they feel that it is time for them to allow others to lead our people. The sage you speak of lives in a secluded village between the two lakes.

Narrator:Ethiliel led the men of the South Guard into the southern forest. Shadows soon covered their paths day and night, and a thick fog filled the air.

For many weeks they marched down nameless paths that no man had trod before. From time to time they saw ghostly images of elven villages and halls in the deep woods, but as they advanced, even those became scarce.

Finally Ethiliel told the men to halt and pitch camp - they had reached the Black River, beyond which no elf or man would willingly pass.

This tells us that the Aethenwood elves were lead (not ruled) by sages and that while there where Elvish settlements in the Southwoods in ancient times they are abandoned for quite some time.

My proposition would be to at least in the description of the Elvish High King, perhaps even the campaign dialogue itself, explain why there are elves in the Southwood. My idea for this would go as follows:

In times of the corruption by black magic and subsequent destruction of the lich that once had been the greatest sage of the Aethenwood elves, their people became dissatisfied with the wise but loose leadership of the sages. They instead turned to follow the clear voices of their ranger generals, distinguished fighters and battle commanders. Nevertheless, the elvish populace flourished in the ensuing peace and in the years to follow the greatest of those generals lead them into the Southwoods to cleanse them of the remaining evil and reclaim the forests they once dwelled in.
In an unprecented event, the southern elves then crowned Nuvdael [that still his name?] as their first High King in 618 YW [arbitrarily decided] to mark this turning point of their age. They are now lead by a master of blade and bow, yet most of the elvish people are not of a martial nature and they are content in the knowledge that their king still seeks the council of the old sages and druids to ensure the prowess of his rangers is only to be relied upon in the most dire circumstances.

Genie-Kabir:

"Genie-Kabir are greater djinns that often fight for a greater cause that directly or indirectly harms their enemy, the afariyaten. However, unlike their enemies whose only goal in life resides in complete annihilation, the Genie-Kabir are highly interested in maintaining and increasing their friendship with the people of the deserts, the ones that saved them from the destructive magic of the Three Kings. Weilding a magical scimitar, they are ready to protect themselves and their allies from any threat that comes to both parties."

-> fight for a greater cause that directly or indirectly harms their enemy, the afariyaten -> work to further their races eternal cause to harm and hinder their ancient enemy, the afariyaten
(not sure if eternal and ancient are fitting with the campaign lore, remove them at will)
-> Weilding a magical scimitar -> Wielding magical scimitars
-> that comes to both parties -> to either of them

Great Khalid:

While there are numerous small cities througout the sandy wastes and the ashland desert, that once were trading posts and have grown since then, there are only three major cities and each small city lies in the realm of one of the three greater cities: Serrul, the Pearl of the Desert, lies in the south of the sandy wastes and just northwards of the Bay of Clouds, while Th'arwya, the City of Gold, and its enormous tower lies to the north of the ashland deserts and southwards of the Bay of Clouds and Kesh, the military focussed city that is also called the Iron City lies to the east of the bay in the harsh mountains that are a natural barrier to the desert lands. Since the early ages of the desert lands, each of these cities have had their own succession of Great Khalids to rule over the city and its surrounding realm.

Sometimes, Great Khalids don't originate from the civil population. Instead, it is often seen, that shortly before the end of the reign or life of a Great Khalid, foreign men with a great sense of leadership and wisdom appear and win the current Great Khalid's favor and thus are proclaimed heir to the throne of the Pearl, Gold or Iron.

In 676 YW, the Great Khalids of Serrul, Th'arwya and Kesh united their vast realms and established the city of K'thar, that was meant to be a new great capitol of the desert lands. These Great Khalids are since that time known as the Three Kings and the stories of their rule still invoke fear throughout the people of the deserts."

-> that once were trading posts and have grown since then -> grown since their founding as trading posts
-> major cities and each small city lies in the realm of one of the three greater cities -> greater cities and all others lie in the realms belonging to them
-> the military focussed city that is also called the Iron City -> the city of martial might also called the Iron City,
-> Sometimes, Great Khalids don't originate from the civil population. Instead, it is often seen, that shortly before the end of the reign or life of a Great Khalid, foreign men with a great sense of leadership and wisdom appear and win the current Great Khalid's favor and thus are proclaimed heir to the throne of the Pearl, Gold or Iron. -> Inheritance is not always the way to a Great Khalid's throne though. It is known that when the end of reign or life of a Great Khalid nears there will often appear a stranger with a great wisdom and sense of leadership. Throughout history many such a man was procclaimed heir to the thron of Pearl, Gold or Iron after winning their predecessors favor.
-> since that time -> now or since then
-> people of the deserts -> lands of the deserts

Black Dragon:

Black Dragons are just a mere myth. Yet these myths that are being told to little children are surprisingly detailed, which implies that there has been a small number of men that in fact encountered these mighty creatures.

-> Stories of Black Dragons are known to be a mere myth. Yet, these legends told to little children throughout the desert contain surprising amounts of details and every so often rumors of encounters with such a creauture circulate. [Now tell me traveller, is it wise to believe in children's stories? Probably not, but does this mean you should follow such a rumor to its source? Walk then on the fine path between gullibility and recklessness, but beware the tales end.]
(The latter part is inspired by a discussion in The Name of the Wind (or The Wise Mans Fear, not sure which one) about the local stories of a dangerous forest and the difference between scientifically taking the rumors at face value and actually going into the woods. I´m a sucker for that meta-narration angle )

Scarab Beetle:

Scarab Beetles are seemingly ignoring the physical boundaries of the morphology and physiology of arthropods, as they are as huge as a goat. Wearing a hardened horn above his heads, the Scarab Beetles are known to be able to impale men. Beside that, there are people that are trimming them for war.

-> are seemingly ignoring -> seem to ignore or seemingly ignore
-> physical boundaries -> just boundaries since physiology follows anyway.
-> are as huge as a goat -> grow [as] huge as a goat
-> his heads -> their heads
-> Beside that, there are people that are trimming them for war -> For this reason and others, there a people known to train them for war
(or did you actually mean that they trim the horns for war? Doesn´t make sense to me)

Minotaur:

Minotaurs have the statue of both man and bull and are often found in the eastern parts of the mountainside around Kesh and the eastern flatlands. These strong creatures are often caught and trimmed for war, but oftentimes, catching a minotaur leads to the death of numerous soldiers and hunters, that could have played a role in wars. Thus, using these unstable creatures in war is a matter to think about not only once, but rather thrice.

-> often -> doesn´t fit with the following description IMO; occasionally
-> trimmed -> trained again I guess? tamed would also be an option, albeit a bad one, as you don´t really want to make your war beasts too tame.
(to trim sth. -> ich habe keine Ahnung was Abrichten auf Objekte bezogen bedeuten könnte, aber trim fällt definitv darunter )
-> oftentimes, catching -> oftentimes catching
-> that could have played a role in wars -> resulting in a loss of valuable manpower to rival the beasts own worth
-> Thus, using these unstable creatures in war is a matter to think about not only once, but rather thrice. -> Thus, the decision to field these unstable creatures is not a matter to be taken lightly and better be thought through thrice.

Najae-Snake:

While the bite of the najae-snakes itself is not deadly, the poison that is injected during the bite is known to slowly devour the victim from the inside.

-> najae-snakes -> Najae-Snakes (perhaps naming it Najae-snake in all its occurences would be more fitting, I´m not really good with english capitalization...)

Mummy:

A mummy is the corpse of a fallen warrior whose soul was rejected to enter the realms of death. Filled with hatred, a mummy then roams the dark places of the desert lands to find a different way to end their suffering.

-> rejected to enter the realms of death -> denied entry to the realm of the dead
-> to find -> seeking

Oh man, after all these descriptions I´m even more eager to play the new version... Perhaps I´ll find a way to get to it before october

[Eagle_11]

*trained for warfare could func best under Minotaur descr for your confusion spot.

[foamyd]

Hi, great campaign. I enjoy it.
I've searched for the eye of the dragon on this topic but only found advice on page 6.


Eye of the Dragon does not seem to work.
Version: Battle for Wesnoth 1.13.5
Scenario: Six_Feet_Under
Tested on a fresh Arif, on the Dwarven Hero and the piercing fighters

It is supposed to add +1 Attacks?
So a dwarve who has 17-2 base values would get to 17-3. But it seems not to work on any character.

[Kwandulin]

Hey,

when equipped with the eye of the dragon, you can attack twice per turn. So you actually get a (17x2)x2 attack on Uthain and not a 17x3 or 17x4. This is a relatively new feature within the 1.13.x series and it doesn't have any visual that shows it (beside the orb that stays yellow after the first attack).

I hope that clarifies your problem.

Edit: And thanks again, Whiskeyjack, for improving the descriptions!

[foamyd]

Hey, that's a fast response.
It is clarified indeed and confirmed working.
Thanks a lot.

[ahmannar]

Your remarks about the elvish high king are on point Whiskeyjack, in mainline lore it's not referred as the elves having some kind of king or someone in a similar role as that.
If there's a need to spread the information you wrote about him (which is a nice connection between this story and the established lore, by the way) and kwandulin wants to do it, my suggestion is spreading it out in 3 places: there's the introduction before the khalifate arrive in the woods, the journey from southwood to serrul (ilriel could share a bit of that information with dawoud) and, finally, there's the time when nuvdael joins the group and might be questioned, by dawoud, on the reason of why is an elven king risking his life in such an dangerous endeavor.

[Kwandulin]

I've uploaded 0.9.5 to the servers that fixes most of the issues mentioned (I hadn't been able to come up with a good idea to fix the Elvish High King issue).

Most important changes:

• changed AMLAs of most heroes
• noted that potions act like items
• merged S15: A Heavy Price, S16: Ceremony of old, S17: The Sphere into one scenario: S15: Uzar the Betrayer
• made Waghad-al-lahab useful
• heavy changes to S9: Beneath the sands
• weakened enemy in S18: Battle of the Eons
• added full set of descriptions (special thanks to ahmannar and Whiskeyjack)
• added unique sprites for Ridwan and Ibn Ghani

Thanks for your support!

[Eagle_11]

'High King' may be an honorary title given to him by the local ruling council to commemorate an grand deed of his, perhaps.
Or it may be an self-styled non-functional title, if he is an tyrantlike ruler.

[ahmannar]

As i promised, i will be posting here the reviews of the campaign as i pass them. All of them are on hard difficulty, with BfW version 1.13.5 (for the difficulty rate, i'll be using the logic on this thread -> viewtopic.php?f=6&t=40637).

Drought:

Spoiler:

Difficulty:6.
Dialog/story:Fine as it is.
Level of fun:8, it's a good starting scenario and it poses some challenge on how to timely divide the army in order to beat the enemy leaders in time.
Major challenges: The turn limit is something of a stretch in here. I got somewhat lucky in the final turns on the northern front and was able to defeat the bandit leader on time(20 out of 20 turns), otherwise a restart would have been needed. Without it, the difficulty would have been more like a 7 probably.
Restarts:No restarts needed (barely).
Bugs: Don´t know if the feature of displaying the description of items on the units that were equipped was supposed to be in here already, but it doesn´t show up.
Also, the sword on this scenario is only pickable by the arif and not by his advancements that use swords. Not sure if this is a bug or not, but they should be able to use it, as it's normal to get level 2 units in this level with the amount of enemy units available.
Final statistics:9 recruited units, 4 losses, 5 level 2 units, 29 kills and 96 bonus gold.

EDIT: I initially intended to try another revision of the text along my replay of the campaign, but i think it's beyond my capabilities to improve it any further. If there´s any type of additional feedback you would like for each scenario, tell me and i will include it in the future.



Peril:

Spoiler:

Difficulty:7.
Dialog/story:Fine as it is.
Level of fun:9, there's a need of urgency in this level and obtaining all the goodies in this one requires some shifts of strategy in the scenario that are welcomed.
Major challenges: Although i could have finished some turns before the last one, i wanted to milk some exp and get the final chest treasure. I got lucky again in here when i didn´t noticed that Ilriel was so close to being next to an elvish rider on one turn, which would mean a new restart (puting this difficulty level more in line with . Seeing as the campaign is gradually increasing difficulty and the fact that i already knew the general strategy to pass this, this campaign should be really hard to pass on this difficulty.
Restarts:One restart needed. Having to restart this scenario boils down to not being able to enter the caves of the trolls before the elves catching up, because that would mean being between two armies. That´s what happened in my first try unfortunately.
Bugs: It´s not really a bug, but more like an "unwanted behavior". Having the AI send elves to capture the villages near the initial base relieves the player forces because it's less elves in the initial front of attack. There´s also the fact that having gold is useless to them. Maybe force the AI in some way to not care about the villages, at least the initial ones? (i'm being kind of a masochist with suggesting this xD).
Final statistics:12 units summoned, 7 losses, 3 advancements, 29 kills and 24 bonus gold.

I forgot to say earlier, no warning for the player regarding the difference in normal BfW style of this campaign compared to others appears in the beginning of it.

EDIT2: I think all the swords in the campaign are kind of bugged and can only be picked up by arif and dawoud. On the next scenario (have paused the playthrough of it because of this), the 2 swords can only be picked up by those 2 units, like it was the case on "drought".

Ideas for commander units dialogue:

Spoiler:

Drought: ->Dawoud could talk about how he misses the times when the chaos around the desert lands was not enough to attract such large bands of people to banditry. Ilriel could follow this up by asking if he's referring to the situation in serrul, to which he replies with something like "We are both eager to find that answer";
The idea with this is to show early in the campaign that something which happened long ago in the deserts had the side effect of attracting people to bad paths in their lives and that, before those times, crossing these sorts of regions wasn't so dangerous as it is now. It also shows that Dawoud isn´t sure of what's happening in serrul, but that he might have some assumptions about it.

Peril -> Dawoud could ask Ilriel if she thinks Nuvdael has tricked them both and enlisted the help of elves unhappy with her decision, to force her return to home by striking at a time the group is more vulnerable. Ilriel could answer that, although he is sometimes difficult to argue with due to his warrior nature, Nuvdael is a good and honest king which would never conspire against the direct advice's of his people as he highly values them .
The idea with this is to show an idea that was possible in the head of dawoud character. After all, he doesn´t know the elf king and he's being attacked by elves, in a bad time for his group. It´s also a good time for Ilriel to assure that the actions of the elves are the cause of a group that completely rejected the logic of their elders and are probably doing by their own will. This could fit well in this scenario since, as Whiskeyjack said earlier, elves don´t have kings in usual situations in the lore and the situation that led to existing one in the southwoods was probably, among other factors, because Nuvdael is one that values the lives and opinions of all his people.

[Kwandulin]

Was a typo and the sword issue should be fixed now.

If there´s any type of additional feedback you would like for each scenario, tell me and i will include it in the future.

In case you're interested, you might want to look out, whether you can find situations where the commander units could talk and reveal some information about themselves.