Non Wesnoth art "Ironclad"
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Non Wesnoth art "Ironclad"
I have started some work on a turnbased marine warfare game named Ironclad.
I might talk abit more about that game later, for now i just want some comments on the victory and defeat screens.
Is it clear enough what is going on?
Regards Joakim
Edit: changed the victory screen according to critique.
I might talk abit more about that game later, for now i just want some comments on the victory and defeat screens.
Is it clear enough what is going on?
Regards Joakim
Edit: changed the victory screen according to critique.
Last edited by JAP on July 18th, 2012, 11:09 pm, edited 1 time in total.
Re: Non Wesnoth art "Ironclad"
I don't know if the cap is supposed to be floating in the sea but just in case, it seems to be flying... The drawing could be more "lose screen"... i don't know it's quite neutral.
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what a beautiful day!- he said- for visiting a red herring
and getting hoarse."
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what a beautiful day!- he said- for visiting a red herring
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Re: Non Wesnoth art "Ironclad"
It is supposed to be floating in the oily water, implying that you are drowned and your ship sunk.
But if that isnt clear i have to rethink the lose screen, any ideas for a god lose screen?
edit: any comments on the victory screen?
But if that isnt clear i have to rethink the lose screen, any ideas for a god lose screen?
edit: any comments on the victory screen?
Re: Non Wesnoth art "Ironclad"
I think the meaning of the defeat screen is pretty clear, it's just that, like perseo said, the cap seems to be floating. So I don't think entirely redoing it is necessary. The victory screen, though isn't as clear. I think it would be more obvious if you could see an enemy submarine sinking in the horizon.
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I like both your portraits, however I would like to add that in your victory screen, the sky looks like one of Turner's paintings, however the man, in direct contrast, looks like a 3D computer model, whilst the ship's side looks like a photograph. This is a little unsettling to see three completely different styles juxtaposed in a single portrait.
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May I still meet my memory in so lonely a place
Between the streams and the red clouds, hearing the curlews, Hearing the horizons endure.
In din of crowded streets, going among the years, the faces,
May I still meet my memory in so lonely a place
Between the streams and the red clouds, hearing the curlews, Hearing the horizons endure.
Re: Non Wesnoth art "Ironclad"
@Amorphous, actually there's smoke on the horizon meaning a enemy submarine sinking, I guess.
The problem on the first image is that the cap doesn't have the same lighting than the sea surface so it seems to be in other place you know, the black part should be under the water in the position because of the cap shape, also try to make a wet fabric effect on the part which is in contact with the water.
The problem on the first image is that the cap doesn't have the same lighting than the sea surface so it seems to be in other place you know, the black part should be under the water in the position because of the cap shape, also try to make a wet fabric effect on the part which is in contact with the water.
"I was pulling a barrow, when I saw a stalking horse
what a beautiful day!- he said- for visiting a red herring
and getting hoarse."
Working on this campaign: The septentrional tower
what a beautiful day!- he said- for visiting a red herring
and getting hoarse."
Working on this campaign: The septentrional tower
Re: Non Wesnoth art "Ironclad"
Yes but the smoke can be misconstrued as an island, the orange being the beach.
High over valleys in the red levelling rays -
In din of crowded streets, going among the years, the faces,
May I still meet my memory in so lonely a place
Between the streams and the red clouds, hearing the curlews, Hearing the horizons endure.
In din of crowded streets, going among the years, the faces,
May I still meet my memory in so lonely a place
Between the streams and the red clouds, hearing the curlews, Hearing the horizons endure.
Re: Non Wesnoth art "Ironclad"
Great this is the kind of critiqe i was hopping for!
It is not actually supposed to be submarins (but i can see that it is easy to make that misstake).
It is supposed to be Monitor class armoured ships( hence the name "Ironclad" ). The kind that almost all of the worlds navys built after the originall USS Monitor had its battle against the CSS Virginia.
It is not actually supposed to be submarins (but i can see that it is easy to make that misstake).
It is supposed to be Monitor class armoured ships( hence the name "Ironclad" ). The kind that almost all of the worlds navys built after the originall USS Monitor had its battle against the CSS Virginia.
To make it clearer by ading some wreckage is a god idea, perheps the ship is broken in half? I will do something about that.The victory screen, though isn't as clear. I think it would be more obvious if you could see an enemy submarine sinking in the horizon
Actually everything is originally a photograph (including the sky and sea), But i see what you mean i will try to make the man and ship more painterly.the sky looks like one of Turner's paintings, however the man, in direct contrast, looks like a 3D computer model, whilst the ship's side looks like a photograph. This is a little unsettling to see three completely different styles juxtaposed in a single portrait.
True, i will fix that when i redo the image (i dont think it is clear enough that there is oil in the water anyway).The problem on the first image is that the cap doesn't have the same lighting than the sea surface so it seems to be in other place you know, the black part should be under the water in the position because of the cap shape, also try to make a wet fabric effect on the part which is in contact with the water.
Re: Non Wesnoth art "Ironclad"
How about this updated version (see the edited opening post) ?
Re: Non Wesnoth art "Ironclad"
Definitely better, though the problem is still there(mainly with the man), but it doesn't matter. Also, the first ironclads were La Gloire, launched 1859, and the HMS Warrior, neither of which were American.
High over valleys in the red levelling rays -
In din of crowded streets, going among the years, the faces,
May I still meet my memory in so lonely a place
Between the streams and the red clouds, hearing the curlews, Hearing the horizons endure.
In din of crowded streets, going among the years, the faces,
May I still meet my memory in so lonely a place
Between the streams and the red clouds, hearing the curlews, Hearing the horizons endure.