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Ignoring what has been said about mages and their staves (see http://www.wesnoth.org/forum/viewtopic.php?t=9970) I made a drawing of a mage, about to throw a fireball to his nearby enemy. He is facing to his left.

It's not quite finished, his robe lacks 'some' outline, the poor guy has no hands yet, and his face is just a shadow. But I think it's quite clear what it should become.

Any suggestions for improvement? Hints, tips, critics?
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Looks a bit lumpy. :|
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Sorta looks like a shaolin monk to me ;)
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me too :lol:
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db0 wrote:Sorta looks like a shaolin monk to me ;)
Whould that for you be a problem if you are told he is a white mage? ;)
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This one is a very early status of a sketch but already has some problems. They should be corrected before you continue with this because later they will be much bigger ones. The leg above the knee is too long, and the foot are totally deformed at the moment. The upper body is a little squary (built with too straight lines) but it can be corrected later.

The pose is dynamic enough and as little can be seen at this stage this one could be a cool image.
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gpetersz wrote:They should be corrected before you continue with this because later they will be much bigger ones.
Yeah, can ruin it very easily (like it did this one, which I have semi abandoned for now untill I get better.)

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gpetersz wrote:This one is a very early status of a sketch but already has some problems. They should be corrected before you continue with this because later they will be much bigger ones. The leg above the knee is too long, and the foot are totally deformed at the moment. The upper body is a little squary (built with too straight lines) but it can be corrected later.

The pose is dynamic enough and as little can be seen at this stage this one could be a cool image.
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I assume you're talking about his left leg.
In my first sketches, the figure had no robe (but jeans). After dressing it with a robe, some proportions have been altered, which I didn't correct afterwards. I'll shorten his leg as soon as I continue. The torso has been modified since I posted the very first version.
Foot are a source of trouble, I didn't yet bother correcting them (In fact, I only added them for myself to have a vague idea in what direction they should point - but I doubt the current direction is the right one.)

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Now, here the upper body became much better. Yes I meant the left leg, I think it connects to the hips (my poor english, I am sorry) too low.
Now only this and the two feet what seems wrong, the outline starts to get quite good.
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Is it just me or does his head look a little... wierd
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Mith wrote:Whould that for you be a problem if you are told he is a white mage? ;)
Uh... yes. :?


My understanding is that white magi are more like robed clergymen than shaolin monks. I am fairly certain this is the orthodox interpretation. ;)



Anyway, the image is decent, but to me it looks more like someone pointing to the sky and going, "Hey, look, my finger is pointing up!" than someone casting a spell. Perhaps it could turn into a good "prayer" portrait - the mage has his hand outstretched towards the sky, and a contemplative look on his face.
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Somewhat Off-Topic: Looking at the sprites i discovered that Dark Arts magi seem to be using nun habits. Adepts have a belt, Necromancers don't and are marked with the a blue line adn some sort of cowl, and Sorcerors have a rectangular mantle clamped by a seal/mark.

Rerailing: For Loyalist magi, they seem to be wearing robes with wide arms, hoods and belts , so for this, i concur with turin saying it looks to "shaolin", although is mostly about the look of the lines below the waist. However:
In my first sketches, the figure had no robe (but jeans). After dressing it with a robe, some proportions have been altered, which I didn't correct afterwards.
If that piece is going to be colored as a robe, then i think it will look okay :) . Keep it up, something good is bound to come out of it, experience and practice at the very least.
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Post by JW »

It's hard to critique a piece of work that has so little done so far. All that can really be reflected on is the stance; and I must agree with Turin about that.
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turin wrote: Anyway, the image is decent, but to me it looks more like someone pointing to the sky and going, "Hey, look, my finger is pointing up!" than someone casting a spell. Perhaps it could turn into a good "prayer" portrait - the mage has his hand outstretched towards the sky, and a contemplative look on his face.
In Wesnoth mages have staves... even the white mage(It is with ankh on end, but it is still staff... :lol: ) So I suppose that if he would draw the staff in the lower-positioned hand and used the upper hand to cast the spell from the ankh on the top of the staff I suppose the pose is okay...
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Sea Elf wrote:Is it just me or does his head look a little... wierd
I think the head is not at all finished at the moment. It is just there to provide some... placeholding.... or something. To be there to see the balance.
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