UMC Campaign Request: Bad Moon Rising (never mind)

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UMC Campaign Request: Bad Moon Rising (never mind)

Post by doofus-01 » April 9th, 2009, 2:01 pm

Apologies if this thread is not OK to put here, but UMC was mentioned in the welcome sticky. If this disappears, then I'll know...
esr wrote:
dlp wrote: My availability is high, but I doubt there will be much call for my skills once the manual edits are done.
You must be joking!...
Yep. Not to distract anyone from working on the core & mainline writing, but I could use some help on the writing front. Good writing is very important, but so are other aspects of a campaign. Compromises must be made, and so the text & dialogue of Bad Moon Rising is less than stellar.

I'm not asking someone to clean up the grammar and typos, though that would be nice. Rather, I'd ask someone to go over the text and say what doesn't make sense, what dialogue is wooden or modern colloquial. So, if you thought the campaign was nice, but were unimpressed with the text and would be willing and able to improve it, let me know and we'll work out a game plan.

Thanks
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EDIT: People were nice enough to help, but I cannot keep this coordinated. I'll just go on as ever; bad grammar, style, and all that.
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Re: UMC Campaign Request: Bad Moon Rising

Post by catwhowalksbyhimself » April 12th, 2009, 6:20 pm

I'd be willing to go over it for grammar and such at least, and give feedback on the general flow as well, although I'm not sure how much time I'll have to go over it in detail.

Grammar and spelling would be simple enough to work on, at least.

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Re: UMC Campaign Request: Bad Moon Rising

Post by doofus-01 » April 12th, 2009, 9:36 pm

Thanks! Anything you have time for would be great.

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Re: UMC Campaign Request: Bad Moon Rising

Post by catwhowalksbyhimself » April 12th, 2009, 10:27 pm

In that case, I'll download it and starting going through the text (and playing it)

How do you want me to send the edits? PM, here, or I could upload the files to my web space and send you a link.

I've now gone over Part 1, and have found nothing to complain about. Dialog seems decent, and I can't find any typos or spelling errors with one exception. There's a missing closing parenthesis in the opening dialog in Mission 1. That's all though.

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