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Re: Aura's Sprite Realm - New 05/12/09, Highlander Knight

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You may want to also make it clear whether his face is fully covered by his helm or whether some sort of facial elements are going to be partially visible.
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Re: Aura's Sprite Realm - New 05/12/09, Highlander Knight

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Hmmm to me his legs look symmetrical making him look duck footed. Nice sprite though, these are coming along well :).
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Re: Aura's Sprite Realm - New 05/12/09, Highlander Knight

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Ok. I'm going to try some more sprites soonish.
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Re: Aura's Sprite Realm - New 05/12/09, Highlander Knight

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Amazonian Centaur and Wizardess.

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Re: Aura's Sprite Realm - New 18/1/10, Amazon Centaur, Wizardess

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As a rule you usually don't want anything at exactly 90 degree or 45 degree angles as you have them in the centaur and wizardess respectively.
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Re: Aura's Sprite Realm - New 18/1/10, Amazon Centaur, Wizardess

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Ok two problems I can see:

1. The centaur's legs are bending backwards slightly.
2. You might want to consider lowering the right one's breasts a bit. Right now they're higher than her shoulders.
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Re: Aura's Sprite Realm - New 18/1/10, Amazon Centaur, Wizardess

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Better ?

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Any more comments for the wizardess ? I want to improve her.
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Re: Aura's Sprite Realm - New 18/1/10, Amazon Centaur, Wizardess

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Horse legs bend that way, right?
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Re: Aura's Sprite Realm - New 18/1/10, Amazon Centaur, Wizardess

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Aura wrote:Any more comments for the wizardess ? I want to improve her.
  • The sword is in an awkward position - if the sword was pointed in the opposite direction (up and right), it would look much more convincing; or if the sword-holding arm was lowered down, in a more static position, it would be even better.
  • The sword is under 45 degrees from the up/down axis; arbitrary, messy degrees like ~10 degrees from the up/down axis look more convincing
  • The sword is white - look at the swords of mainline units, they are actually strongly shaded and colorful.
  • You are pillow-shading. Not every body-part should have the same level of highlights & shadows - eg the belly should be wholly darker.
  • Don't have breasts as circles like that; draw a solid-color torso with no weird circles on it, and then draw highlights on it to where the top side of breasts should be.
  • The dress does not look natural - her body looks like a cone pointing upwards. Hips are very important, you don't have them at all.
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Re: Aura's Sprite Realm - New 18/1/10, Amazon Centaur, Wizardess

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I attempted fixes for most of that stuff (gave her a second fireball instead of a new-pose sword but I can always go back and put one in again).

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Any better than before ?
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Re: Aura's Sprite Realm - New 18/1/10, Amazon Centaur, Wizardess

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Slightly better, but pillow-shading is your major problem.
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Re: Aura's Sprite Realm - New 18/1/10, Amazon Centaur, Wizardess

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On everything ? Or mainly the torso ?
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Re: Aura's Sprite Realm - New 18/1/10, Amazon Centaur, Wizardess

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Everything. Eg now her right hand should probably be really dark.
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Re: Aura's Sprite Realm - New 18/1/10, Amazon Centaur, Wizardess

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Do you have a link to a tutorial explaining how to shade well on similar sprites handy ? I'm going to try redoing the shading if it's the biggest problem.I tried a little, but I don't know if this is an improvement. If not I'll probably erase all the shading and redo the lot.

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Re: Aura's Sprite Realm - New 18/1/10, Amazon Centaur, Wizardess

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It isn't really pixel-art specific - you just have to have some logic behind the highlights, not just the same kind of highlight on everything.

Eg here the first figure has the same highlight/shadow tones for all parts of her body which is bad, but third figure has them roughly according to placement & light direction which is good: http://itchstudios.com/psg/tuts/value1.jpg (from this big tutorial, http://itchstudios.com/psg/art_tut.htm that kitty especially likes to link to)

EDIT: And yeah, that is better - but make the highlights/shadows contrast higher. Also, breasts should probably not be separate balls, but form a single wide bump under the cloth.
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